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Post by Odin Balfore on Aug 6, 2019 14:47:27 GMT -5
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Post by Bolas De Arana on Aug 6, 2019 19:38:35 GMT -5
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Post by Kennedy Matthews on Aug 9, 2019 0:44:22 GMT -5
Damn... sucked so bad I killed Odin of boredom
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Post by Odin Balfore on Aug 9, 2019 9:00:05 GMT -5
My work week got unexpectedly busy
Also, I can't read.
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Post by Kennedy Matthews on Aug 9, 2019 12:20:10 GMT -5
My work week got unexpectedly busy Also, I can't read. Oh I remember hearing that around the water cooler hahahahah.. In all seriousness no rush man
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Post by Odin Balfore on Aug 10, 2019 6:41:42 GMT -5
My work week got unexpectedly busy Also, I can't read. Oh I remember hearing that around the water cooler hahahahah.. In all seriousness no rush man Roleplay: Untitled rp2 Handler: Kennedy Overall thoughts: saddest part is there is no title Rating Overview Scene Description: 3 Character Development: 3 Shoot: 3 Flow: 5 RATING: 3. 5 of 5 ___________________________________ CRITICAL REVIEW I think the promo had some strong moments, coming at Culture shock as more of just a group rather than a family or even a real team. You said that you feel Slayer and Bull are just Listers lackies and that really hurts Bull whos the hardcore Champion. It was weird to see Bull get the least amount of shoot cuz hes a champion but you had history with Slayer and worked that well with the lipstick comment. You introduced the pregnancy test which is a good bit of CD and makes people want to see next week if you’re pregnant. I’m interested. I wanna read ( even though my sources tell me that I cant ) but really theres no complaints with this promo. Most everything is based in a word count and that's super limiting but you did a good job with this _____________________ SUGGESTIONS none.
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Post by Odin Balfore on Aug 12, 2019 16:54:10 GMT -5
read: Enrique Seaguleglaseis... dont care about the rest. you win.
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Post by Kyle Kemp on Aug 19, 2019 15:13:13 GMT -5
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Post by Dandy DiVito on Aug 19, 2019 15:21:13 GMT -5
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Post by Odin Balfore on Aug 19, 2019 17:13:23 GMT -5
Roleplay: Usurping the Kings Handler: Dandy Devito Overall thoughts: the culmination of a characters journey Rating Overview Scene Description: 2 Character Development: 3 Shoot: 3 Flow: 5 RATING: 3 of 5 ___________________________________ CRITICAL REVIEW You made this enjoyable and fun, to say the least. The match shoot was on point and felt real and not wooden like some people. You always keep true to Dandy. You stuck to your bread and butter which is good. Sometimes people will overcompensate to get an edge and you just went out there, did Dandy and it paid off. I think you know where I’m going to say your lacking so I’ll just leave it at that if you know your short commings. I’m always upset when I don’t see PPV quality RPs but theres also a strict word count so you have to make concessions to tell your story and you told your story of how you went out there and got what was yours and did things your way. Its cathartic for me to see your charcter be world champion considering that ZMACs always a fringe outlier. Maybe theres something that I could learn from you. Your shoot was on point and you just messed dudes up _____________________ SUGGESTIONS I dont have nothin for you. You’re doing your character justice. Anything else might hurt him
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Post by Dandy DiVito on Aug 19, 2019 17:52:39 GMT -5
I saw some of this response coming. I would be a liar if I said I wasn’t surprised about a good portion of it. Haha
Thanks.
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Jordan
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Post by Jordan on Aug 20, 2019 0:04:45 GMT -5
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Lockhart
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Playtime is over.
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Post by Lockhart on Aug 20, 2019 1:31:07 GMT -5
actionwrestling.freeforums.net/thread/3856/corduroy-dreamsThis differs heavily from my usual style, far less shoot than normal, more character development/story, and not based at all in reality. Not expecting the best grade here since it's a bit of an odd one from me, but keen for feedback nonetheless.
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Post by Odin Balfore on Aug 21, 2019 14:29:09 GMT -5
Roleplay: S2 E4 Handler: KOS Overall thoughts: episodes have titles… Rating Overview Scene Description: 2 Character Development: 3 Shoot: 4 Flow: 5 RATING: 3 of 5 ___________________________________ CRITICAL REVIEW This is similar to dandy in layout, although I think its better than his, its not without fault. I’m all shoot, all day but we’re at a major PPV and you want to just give me brick work text? Did the stone cutters make this rp? You gone come out with a hammer tattood on ya butt cheeks? I can never let it slide when RPs dont live up to ppv status. It bugs me personally. This is the perfect promo to really dig into the character and the struggles and livin in East Jesus and what that would mean for the community. Glad you went bowling though. You went bowling and had a throw away conversation ( your hidden meanings were worth jack IMO ) and then just went into black shoot. Where in your mind were you like: “ Hey, its ALL IN -> Its a world title match -> this is the top of my career -> what should I do? -> bowling!” At least you were already in clown shoes. I dont even care about the shoot because the whole promo is a throw away. You started nice with philispohical stuff and then you went bowling and you block txtd me to fucking hell and back. There no beats, theres no actions, theres no real anything to keep me invested. Just shoot. Its better than Dandy but it doesnt support itsself and ends up being a weak promo _____________________ SUGGESTIONS Words need to matter. Make your scenes matter
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T.F.K.
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Post by T.F.K. on Aug 21, 2019 21:40:44 GMT -5
Ladder To The Stars
Give me the hard dickings sir. I've been working on that TFK edge to navigate that main event murky waters and I know you'll lay the thicking down for me.
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Post by Crimson Blackwell on Aug 22, 2019 0:21:07 GMT -5
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Post by Odin Balfore on Aug 22, 2019 9:43:56 GMT -5
Lockhart
Tfk
Slayer
I'll do my best to get through this today
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Lockhart
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Playtime is over.
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Post by Lockhart on Aug 22, 2019 10:00:21 GMT -5
Take your time dude, we all mad appreciative of what you're doing. <3
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T.F.K.
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Post by T.F.K. on Aug 22, 2019 10:27:48 GMT -5
I second that
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Post by Crimson Blackwell on Aug 22, 2019 10:33:52 GMT -5
Agreed
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