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Post by Joey Flash on Sept 12, 2019 1:10:25 GMT -5
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Post by Odin Balfore on Sept 12, 2019 16:46:34 GMT -5
Roleplay: Megal Vania
Handler: Flash
Overall thoughts:
Rating Overview
Scene Description: 3
Character Development: 3
Shoot: 5
Flow: 5
RATING: 4 of 5
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CRITICAL REVIEW
This is all shoot which of course, is my cup of tea and my prefered style and Flash always does this better than I do. This RP feels like Eminem vs MGK. Like MGK tryin to swing hard and Em dont event need to reply but lol fuck it. The promo is hinging on Flash annoyed that Ryan is a rip off and you do set up different points but it does feel like how youre coming out to do this just to disappear again. In this aspect, I’m not sold. There is nothing in the piece that I saw that's going to show that Flash winning means anything.
Cool. you won. You bodied the Big Sad. great. Now what? Now Ryan comes back and rides this out on your coat tails, again. I never got the sense of the death blow, more like you’re just swatting at him.
Ryan being like you, Sancho and a few others was the best line. Ryan being an amalgamation is the most cutting thing that he would have to respond to and defend. The comparison is there but this feels like a step down for the character rather than rising to a challenge or have a good match. I don’t think anyone ‘wins’ in this match so theres no stakes.
The promo boils down to ‘ I’m gonna beat this Flash-lite pleb’ and that's cool and all that's always kinda Flashs thing. Whats the end result for flash? Where does this leave him? Kill the cash cow, go away… and what? Considering Flashd status unless hes coming back, the shoot without furthering the match and the angle just hurts the match.
I would have liked to see more match and angle hype. _____________________
SUGGESTIONS
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Post by Guillotine (QDT) on Sept 12, 2019 16:59:37 GMT -5
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Post by Beau Del Sol on Sept 12, 2019 17:27:28 GMT -5
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Post by Odin Balfore on Sept 13, 2019 19:58:56 GMT -5
Roleplay: Opus: Coda Handler: QDT Overall thoughts: You dont know that name of that spider Rating Overview Scene Description: 5 Character Development: 5 Shoot: 5 Flow: 5 RATING: 5 of 5 ___________________________________ CRITICAL REVIEW From top to bottom you told a heartfelt story and have everyone a recap. I felt it was a little long in the tooth but it wasnt a terrible thing. I was worrying that all the back story would effect the core match content but I didnt find that to be the case. You effectively conveyed the weight for QDT and what this means. Wade is actively and passively challenging QDT on multiple levels. You set up how all of QDTs life could end up being a fragile lie. That's the most intriguing part of this, QDT knows theres so much on the line but it doesn't stop you from bringing intellectual heat. You even ended the piece with Tawny coming back and that's just going to further confuse QDT and his life going forward. Even though you undressed wade with your shoot, you still kept him as a strong menace.As the face, you cant really go hard and shoot like the heel but you really brought it. It was very impressive _____________________ SUGGESTIONS none
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Post by Guillotine (QDT) on Sept 13, 2019 20:55:38 GMT -5
Roleplay: Opus: Coda Handler: QDT Overall thoughts: You dont know that name of that spider Rating Overview Scene Description: 5 Character Development: 5 Shoot: 5 Flow: 5 RATING: 5 of 5 ___________________________________ CRITICAL REVIEW From top to bottom you told a heartfelt story and have everyone a recap. I felt it was a little long in the tooth but it wasnt a terrible thing. I was worrying that all the back story would effect the core match content but I didnt find that to be the case. You effectively conveyed the weight for QDT and what this means. Wade is actively and passively challenging QDT on multiple levels. You set up how all of QDTs life could end up being a fragile lie. That's the most intriguing part of this, QDT knows theres so much on the line but it doesn't stop you from bringing intellectual heat. You even ended the piece with Tawny coming back and that's just going to further confuse QDT and his life going forward. Even though you undressed wade with your shoot, you still kept him as a strong menace.As the face, you cant really go hard and shoot like the heel but you really brought it. It was very impressive _____________________ SUGGESTIONS none … I think I can die happy now Thank you. It's been incredible working with Wade and I wanted to do the ending justice before we both move onto other things.
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Lockhart
Professional Wrestler
Playtime is over.
Posts: 743
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Post by Lockhart on Sept 14, 2019 0:58:30 GMT -5
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Post by Odin Balfore on Sept 16, 2019 13:56:04 GMT -5
Beau and Lockhart on deck
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Post by Odin Balfore on Sept 16, 2019 16:00:52 GMT -5
Roleplay: You Aint Got It In You
Handler: Beau Stylzes-Blaze
Overall thoughts: Prolly one of the better rps
Rating Overview
Scene Description: 3
Character Development: 4
Shoot: 5
Flow: 5
RATING: 3.5 of 5
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CRITICAL REVIEW
I was impressed by this promo and think its one of the best promos you’ve done with Beau. You went into a hardcore match and you shot and shot and just murdered everyone. I laughed so hard at “ Corey, you’re stinky pussy is next” and I’m like, that's so true. Its next. Beau Blaze found his division. Its just all sick bastards and that's Beau, this cowboy from Hell and its great to see that you had fun with this piece and everything flowed and you could let loose.
I’m happy to see this and I don’t have anything bad to say about it.
You’ve improved a lot and more so because I can tell how comfortable you are in this type of setting.
This could be dangerous going forward. Keep it up _____________________
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Post by Kennedy Matthews on Sept 18, 2019 3:11:28 GMT -5
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Post by Corey Bull on Sept 22, 2019 7:29:42 GMT -5
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Teo Blaze
Professional Wrestler
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Posts: 334
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Post by Teo Blaze on Sept 22, 2019 22:32:30 GMT -5
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Post by Odin Balfore on Sept 23, 2019 16:15:38 GMT -5
Roleplay: The Man Who Had Everything Handler: Lockhart Overall thoughts: Prolly one of the better rps Rating Overview Scene Description: 4 Character Development: 5 Shoot: 5 Flow: 5 RATING: 4.5 of 5 ___________________________________ CRITICAL REVIEW I think that you really tore down Flash in a well thought out and in a systematic fashion. I think the best line was that: “ Your failure brought you to me.” As much as that was a one off, I thought it was powerful. You took the comparison that's been made and this dream match set up and delivered on it. This is was a fantastic promo. You made this a sad day for Flash in prolly one of your better rps. Theres nothing I feel to be critical about. I dont feel as though you’ve made any mis-steps as a character or in presentation. You went for the throat and you got it. _____________________ SUGGESTIONS none
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Post by Odin Balfore on Sept 23, 2019 18:52:27 GMT -5
Roleplay: How I became your Mother: chapt 2 Handler: Kennedy Overall thoughts: Kennedy is stepping up. Rating Overview Scene Description: 4 Character Development: 5 Shoot: 5 Flow: 5 RATING: 4.5 of 5 ___________________________________ CRITICAL REVIEW You’re really making the journey with Kennedy as a character, member of the royal family and as possible world champion. The improvement that you made has been stellar. I’m digging what you’re doing and the way your whole promo dynamic has grown. The attacks on Karlie as not being a credible LGBT because her wanton sexual desire that you feel isnt apart of who you are is amazing CD when you get to thinking about it. I’m rooting for Kennedy. Unless I fight you - then, well.. Sorry lol If you’re not ready for main event matches, christ, you’re nearly there. I think you’re doing a great job of standing out and anyone who might lump you into just part of the royal family or confusing you with Nash,its an important identity that you’re making. I think you took this and be nice to see more along these lines _____________________ SUGGESTIONS none
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Post by Kennedy Matthews on Sept 23, 2019 21:40:49 GMT -5
Roleplay: How I became your Mother: chapt 2 Handler: Kennedy Overall thoughts: Kennedy is stepping up. Rating Overview Scene Description: 4 Character Development: 5 Shoot: 5 Flow: 5 RATING: 4.5 of 5 ___________________________________ CRITICAL REVIEW You’re really making the journey with Kennedy as a character, member of the royal family and as possible world champion. The improvement that you made has been stellar. I’m digging what you’re doing and the way your whole promo dynamic has grown. The attacks on Karlie as not being a credible LGBT because her wanton sexual desire that you feel isnt apart of who you are is amazing CD when you get to thinking about it. I’m rooting for Kennedy. Unless I fight you - then, well.. Sorry lol If you’re not ready for main event matches, christ, you’re nearly there. I think you’re doing a great job of standing out and anyone who might lump you into just part of the royal family or confusing you with Nash,its an important identity that you’re making. I think you took this and be nice to see more along these lines _____________________ SUGGESTIONS none Thanks man. This means a lot.
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Post by Kennedy Matthews on Oct 4, 2019 0:48:11 GMT -5
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Post by Odin Balfore on Oct 4, 2019 16:15:26 GMT -5
please lol ya'll are so good, you guys should be reviewing my scrub promos
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Post by 𝗖𝗢𝗥𝗘𝗬 𝗕𝗟𝗔𝗖𝗞 on Oct 19, 2019 22:15:48 GMT -5
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