Post by Corey Bull on Jun 24, 2019 18:59:55 GMT -5
actionwrestling.freeforums.net/thread/3436/cold-3
read my opponents and saw he went a similar route with the asylum. So I was going through all the old storylines Bull has had over the years and delved into one that happened a long time ago. I feel good about this piece, but still want any advice I can get.
Roleplay: Cold 3 / 3
Handler: bull
Overall thoughts: fact checked the origin of “Bull” derived from Norse ‘Boli,’
Rating Overview
Scene Description: 4
Character Development: 4
Shoot: 4
Flow: 5
RATING: 4.5 of 5
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CRITICAL REVIEW
You managed to do a ton in this promo and I love to see that. The word management was fantastic. I went and looked up the origin for Bull and it Old Norse “Boli” so wheater you knew that or not, it works in your favor and lends credibility to your character development. The whole scene was set was wonderful and I worried that you put too much into it ( as its easy to do if you like it ) but you only ended up with 200 words in that first section. Another thing was that it was the bulk of your description so its not like you wasted it. You had beats for Bull that services to transition the monologue
I enjoyed the history of Lacys death and it gave a lot of insight into the character. The Development of Bull really shown in that little story of how you shattered that guys jaw and crushed his windpipe. Its simple storytelling at its best. I’m raving over this piece because a lot of people want to go over board with the details of a story and its a whole separate side story that ends up detracting from the whole promo. You told a story that fits into the character, the overall desire of the promo and its location. You did not waste any words or emotions in this piece and you were blunt. You go through these emotions of Bull has fire in his eyes, then shoots then calms down, comes back to earth but hes still stern and strong.
None of this feels as though its against Bulls personality or that its forced to make him look tougher or bigger than he is. I fully believe Bull is the Hardcore champion and that he will be hard to unseat. I think Wolf can, but lord, will that be a fight.
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SUGGESTIONS
A promo like this and a style like yours is perfectly suited for the hardcore title. Right now I feel you’re at the apex of that division. I have nothing to give you to enhance what you’re doing here.
I'll admit...I blushed a little. It felt good to read this, then read the results and see that I am on the right track. I do miss doing a little more CD wise. But pulling little pieces of his history out has helped to quench that urge. Thanks a lot, as your input is always appreciated and always considered.