Teo Blaze
Professional Wrestler
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Post by Teo Blaze on Feb 10, 2020 9:43:26 GMT -5
Hello! I try not to ask for feedback too often, and everyone has always been very helpful whenever I do request, but as some of you may have noticed Teo's undergoing a bit of a shift in character lately. I don't necessarily want to spoil where it's going, but I know that it's a departure from the pure babyface stuff (which admittedly I probably haven't done that often anyway). I am very happy with AW, but at the same time I'd be lying if I said it didn't seem time to shake things up a bit. So, if anyone has any time, I would love if you could offer any feedback on the character, and in addition I would like to use this thread to clear up any questions/confusion people have about the character at this point. So if you have one and I can answer without it being a spoiler, throw it in too! Thank you in advance for taking the time, and know that I really do value any input you guys have. actionwrestling.freeforums.net/thread/5205/trial-fire-4-where-smoke
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Dagvald Riddik
Professional Wrestler
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Post by Dagvald Riddik on Feb 10, 2020 16:30:12 GMT -5
The interesting thing that jumped out most about this roleplay was it reminded me of something I could/would write lol. The imagery, scene description, and internal monologue/conflict are very well done and I could learn a thing or two from them. I think the best part was the character development. It’s great to have an open window into Teo’s transformation if you are going to adjust the character again so the audience has an opportunity to understand him from the get-go. As a reader, I understand he is facing a struggle to suppress a frustrated part of his subconscious who is tired of playing second fiddle to the nice guy persona who he perceives as inadvertently portraying itself in a holier than thou fashion.
As for the shoot, it was good and certainly not bad, but I believe it could have been better. I’m not very good at shoot myself but I know damn well when somebody has ripped apart a character. Wesley’s but about Teo’s alter egos was very well done and will be tough to beat. I did really like the part of the shoot about Teo seeing the real Wesley. That was very well executed and they way it was written turned something somewhat simple into something impactful.
Overall this is at the least a great RP for this new direction. Win or lose you will have a sturdy platform from which to construct the rest of Teo’s future down this latest path.
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