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Post by Estrella Luiz ✨ on Jan 15, 2020 23:32:26 GMT -5
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Post by "Dreamcatcher" Ariel Shadows on Jan 19, 2020 8:08:27 GMT -5
I'm going into Trinity staff mode for this one.
4.5/3.0/3.5/5.0 16.0
For everyone who wasn't there, that is the scoring system that Estrella, Geri and myself came up with and used in Trinity.
Relevance is the first number. You made this about the wrestling. You made it about the match and the title. You made it about you. You didn't go off onto tangents that didn't make sense. There's not much smoke to blow up someone's ass in this category.
Creativity is next. I'll get back to this because my feedback needs to be in a certain order.
Development is the third number. There was little character development in terms of a side story, but gobs of it in terms of personality. Character development can be something as simple as "how would your gimmick react if their candy bar got stuck in the vending machine?" More on this in a couple paragraphs.
Shoot is last. You got a perfect God damn score in shoot because you cut a perfect God damn shoot. You put over past opponents to build your title, then sold yourself as some kind of fucking bad ass Salma Hayek. You made me want to see Travis Blake put you on your prissy little ass...but you made me think he might not be able to do it. FUCKING WONDERFUL SHOOT SIS.
In closing...this was a great shoot and a great piece of writing. A kick ass RP. To improve it, just step out of the norm. Put Estrella in different situations. Ask hypothetical questions that only Estrella can answer. Put her in settings that contrast her personality, then sit back and let the fireworks fly.
Don't just do the same old scene every week. You got the imagination to put us in a whole new world. You showed us that with Pandora. And this RP shows us that you also know how to strip away all the flash and give us a five star classic shoot promo. Learn to mix the two together, get the ratio right, and you'll be World Champ in a year.
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