Sahara
Professional Wrestler
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Post by Sahara on Jul 9, 2019 14:50:37 GMT -5
I've been here a few weeks now, and posted a few different RP's that pretty much flow into one another...well, earlier today I posted my first "official" RP for a AW show, and if anyone had any words of advice, critiques, etc., I'd appreciate it. I realize sometimes styles between different feds can clash, so I'm just hoping I did things the AW way and didn't do anything to disqualify myself, etc. Here it is: actionwrestling.freeforums.net/thread/3549/training-week-2-riding-bikeThanks!
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Post by Lissie Hope on Jul 9, 2019 15:13:31 GMT -5
I think you've introduced Sahara nicely, with every piece you wrote. This was a hell of a cap to that little series. Technically, your writing is spot on. Good narrative and scene setting, and I didn't see any spelling or grammar mistakes, and the formatting was nice. I really dig relationships with peripheral characters and how they round out your character's story, and I think Sahara and Rodgers have a fun give-and-take. Really natural dialogue and a fun scene, giving us some backstory without going overboard. Press conferences are good for introductory promos and you did well here, the questions were direct and you gave answers that didn't veer off. It was a little plain, if I'm being honest, but I really like the closer. Couple of hardhitting lines in there. All in all, I like this character and I think this was a class introduction. Looking forward to seeing her get established here.
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Sahara
Professional Wrestler
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Post by Sahara on Jul 9, 2019 16:14:54 GMT -5
I think you've introduced Sahara nicely, with every piece you wrote. This was a hell of a cap to that little series. Technically, your writing is spot on. Good narrative and scene setting, and I didn't see any spelling or grammar mistakes, and the formatting was nice. I really dig relationships with peripheral characters and how they round out your character's story, and I think Sahara and Rodgers have a fun give-and-take. Really natural dialogue and a fun scene, giving us some backstory without going overboard. Press conferences are good for introductory promos and you did well here, the questions were direct and you gave answers that didn't veer off. It was a little plain, if I'm being honest, but I really like the closer. Couple of hardhitting lines in there. All in all, I like this character and I think this was a class introduction. Looking forward to seeing her get established here. Thanks so much for taking the time to both read and respond. And yes, I realize in some regard it’s a little plain right now, I’m just trying to establish the character a bit and to get some interaction going before I can open her up a bit. Thanks again for the comments!
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Post by Odin Balfore on Jul 11, 2019 16:06:57 GMT -5
you'll kill everyone in a few weeks - 2 months tops. dont be shocked if you get pushed hard
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Sahara
Professional Wrestler
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Post by Sahara on Jul 11, 2019 17:54:51 GMT -5
you'll kill everyone in a few weeks - 2 months tops. dont be shocked if you get pushed hard Can’t ... tell ... if ... sarcasm. If not tho ... holy hell. 🔥😎
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Post by Odin Balfore on Jul 11, 2019 17:57:45 GMT -5
you'll kill everyone in a few weeks - 2 months tops. dont be shocked if you get pushed hard Can’t ... tell ... if ... sarcasm. If not tho ... holy hell. 🔥😎 serious. Tort said it himself, hes always lookin for hot talent new ppl. in a couple of weeks or months when you're more comfortable and you've settled in I dont see why a strong push wouldnt happen? Keep workin hard. Read promos. work on your character. get acclimated.
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Post by Alex Richards on Jul 13, 2019 21:12:22 GMT -5
Odins a no bullshit kind of guy..
and for the record he called Noble Savage as a future WCF champion during her first weeks
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Post by Odin Balfore on Jul 13, 2019 21:26:00 GMT -5
Odins a no bullshit kind of guy.. and for the record he called Noble Savage as a future WCF champion during her first weeks To be clear. I am not tort or booking cards. I have no say in pushes. I'm just telling you my opinion based on what I read
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Post by Deleted on Jul 14, 2019 15:31:46 GMT -5
Your combination of openness, CD and willingness to help around the site are recipe for a strong start.
I really like where you've taken so far. Be cool and do you - that's the hardest part, tbh, and you're nailing that (hold for giggles).
Your next move is networking: From what I've seen of your work so far, few people wouldn't want to work with Sahara.
GL on Monday! - da mf'ing Hippo
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Sahara
Professional Wrestler
Posts: 121
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Post by Sahara on Jul 17, 2019 12:49:37 GMT -5
So I've now posted my second official RP -- I wish I had more space available after the character development part of it for some extra shooting, but limitations are what they are. I'm still leaning on establishing her character, and feel it's more important than shit talk at the moment.
Anyone read it? What'd ya think? Is Sahara a nice person or what?! ;D
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