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Post by Kennedy Matthews on May 1, 2019 0:49:41 GMT -5
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Post by Lissie Hope on May 2, 2019 23:48:57 GMT -5
Awkward beginning with Jaice kind of playing the part of the interviewer. Some of the dialogue didn’t seem natural, but once he stopped interjecting and it became more of Kennedy shooting off without lead-in questions, you started to roll. A lot of the insults hit really hard and I liked how concise you presented some of the histories you share with the WCF’ers. All flowed really smooth once you started hitting your stride.
Stylistically, it was was really easy to follow with the underlined names and the groupings of certain competitors. I didn’t like the light shade of pink in scene two; was really hard on the eyes.
The scene with Sadie was really gripping and heartbreaking. It was really nice to see Jaice so supportive of her and her family.
Really dug the epilogue. It was nice to see you get to the meat of what this match meant to Kennedy. Wish there would have been some stylistic spacing instead of a block of text, but that’s a personal preference (as evidenced by my constant line breaks in my RPs). But it was an easy read, it hit all the right notes and you had a final frame that really drove home your issues with your main rivals.
Really liked this piece as a whole. Thought you did a tremendous job.
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