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Post by Carnivore on Dec 17, 2019 11:05:21 GMT -5
Hey, creating this for all advice, constructive criticism, and compliments for my Carnivore character. Feedback for some RPs would be appreciated.
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Post by Carnivore on Dec 17, 2019 11:05:52 GMT -5
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Post by Carnivore on Jan 6, 2020 18:18:08 GMT -5
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Post by Carnivore on Jan 13, 2020 19:58:04 GMT -5
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Post by Carnivore on Feb 24, 2020 19:58:54 GMT -5
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Post by Carnivore on May 6, 2020 21:05:11 GMT -5
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Post by James Nightingale on May 7, 2020 8:45:57 GMT -5
I really liked the shoot man I thought it was good. I think you definitely could have done with some CD in there though as you’ve written 827 words and you had 2K to play with so that might be your downfall. Also another bit of feedback I’d like to suggest is that the last paragraph rather large and makes it harder to read so would aim to keeping them shorter for future rps.
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Post by Dandy DiVito on May 7, 2020 9:48:13 GMT -5
you’ve written 827 words and you had 2K to play with so that might be your downfall. I cannot stress this kind of thing enough, man. Maximizing your word count is one of the most critical steps in improving within this game. When I first started out, I just wrote however long I felt like (I never got near my word count tbh). I'd have matches with a 3k limit and only hit like 1800 or 2000 words and be done. Nowadays? I can't even imagine not going to the last word in almost every RP I write. That said, don't just write to fill space. I could copy+paste the all the lyrics of "Jerry Was A Racecar Driver" by Primus over and over until I hit my cap and while it would be somewhat entertaining, it would also mean I sure as hell lost unless my opponent no-showed. So it's not just about the number of words, Carnivore, but the quality and effect of what you're writing. At this moment, you've got some good starting points, but you need to keep digging. Expand and flesh out that character. Show us (don't just telllllllll ussssssss) what makes Carnivore tick. Show us how his motivations work. Dig in on that character development and help us get to know/understand the happy faced madman.
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