|
Post by Jakob Lister on Jul 21, 2019 22:55:19 GMT -5
Now, things seem to be a tad different here. For the better. Usually I would feel uncomfortable to ask for opinions. If I don't get any likes on a particular RP and if I lost because of that, I would get my own answers from that. But, now I'm curious with opinions on how things could improve in my RPs. Now, I have read when it comes to what it takes to win matches. I will really take that in consideration. So here's the RP.... actionwrestling.freeforums.net/thread/3642/rj-desert-on-nag-name
|
|
Deleted
Deleted Member
Posts: 0
|
Post by Deleted on Jul 22, 2019 1:26:45 GMT -5
TBH Lister,
I like his monologues. However, I feel you could try and find more transitions to keep us oriented in the situation. Likewise, you have such a dynamic voice already - give it another 45 to 60% without looking back. I still don't feel I'm getting Lister's entire gripe from the promo. One more thing to make him scarier: You could try attacking people past some superficial aspects and make more menacing arguments about his opponents. I know we're retraining IT at the moment, but I felt like Jacob could be closer to his brink of going back into his mask than where we see him in this promo.
Great work, funny as hell, and I loved the content for how uniquely grimy you can make Lister's work. I hope that helps some. Keep kicking ass and bullying smaller people.
big bois forever,
- LP
|
|