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Post by Karlie Nash on Jun 12, 2018 17:51:52 GMT -5
So edited my Rp, I tried to use the advice from the I killed the gimmick post, so hit me with your opinion.
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Post by Beau Del Sol on Jun 15, 2018 18:55:25 GMT -5
Love the format. I think it’s your best RP yet. I’m excited to see you build on this with a continuing storyline and a lengthier RP. Your shoot was good. I think some length to explain the story and add extra shoot wold do wonders. Also I’d love to see a more in depth look at Karlies story. Why did your parents join the military. Why couldn’t you go where they where stationed. How did they influence you. What kind of grandparents does Karlie have, how did they not help or help her. And I’d love to see more dialect and depth. Your on the right track my friend!
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Post by Abbi Stein on Jun 16, 2018 22:10:08 GMT -5
FINALLY.
I honestly feel like Karlie has been one dimensional for so long. It's never been a real issue with the gimmick; it's the simple idea that all we really KNEW about Nash was that she banged other lezzie chicks.
I am glad to see that you're fleshing her out as a character and making her multi-faceted. Keep this up, and you'll be top tier competition in no time.
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